Sunday, January 8, 2012

Fixed & reposted this poem. Do you detect any bumps? TY?

This certainly took you awhile to write. The forsaken garden is a common theme, while you had some excellent images, the bench brought a fresh perspective with the flashback to the man. I do think though that your ending couplet could have more impact if you thought about how to end differently. Still, I enjoyed.

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